Ollie Hamiel: No wonder I like the fire station so much. The shiny Brick Red trucks, the Brass pole, oh yeah wait there are the hunky fireman guys.Cute poem L. C. Hugs.
Marylee Lucks: I think it's kinda well done, but give Elaine the points.I just wonder why all the arrows are hunting you, and who is shooting them. It ain't me, I don't miss.
Dionna Doyel: Yes, I could provide more details...but then you would miss the joy of looking it up. There are many variations, one of which is that Luc Bat thing that Dawn found.
Krystal Cordovano: Whoops! Quick, get the laundry in!(A cartoon that stands out in my mind upon reading this...)
Alexander Villas: Makes me sad... now i need to go jump of a building
Jade Ohno: Maybe once, but the ones you miss the most usually never come back..BTW I enjoyed reading "The Gunslinger chronicles"....Very cool
Mario Stricklan: its nice words...umm.... I choose # Games & Recreation > other Games & Recreation! your poem like.... surprised! or like play hide and seek, :-D good luck!...Show more
Porfirio Cahall: Only metaphorically. I internalize anguish.
Floy Fague: "MORNING DANCE"The sun is yet to comeSo is my loveBut the song of a bird foresees the coming glory.I dance in this blue dawn,rejoicing over a new day.The memory of today will be love againcuz I know ,You will be with me forever....Show more
Ricardo Rozelle: Glad I didn't miss this one, I felt myself with you out there alone on the field arrows zipping by, glad you got away!
Cortez Badolato: its great missingi loved iti would say 9/9hope you good and happylove and care for yourZahid from Pakistan...Show more
Alexander Villas: Yes LC I have. very much so.
Jorge Gerrero: That is very nice indeed, you wake up see the sun and the begining of a new day and how the day will end and the person that will be with you for ever! VERY NICE!
Gi! ovanna Sherlin: sounds like something mario woud do to get to ! peach,nice poem
Jonathan Schlussel: Yikes, are you reading my mail?
Vida Miss: Nice .
Roosevelt Pendill: July 2007 was a good vintage month. Serve chilled, with some olives. I like your fragmented work.
Nicolas Cooley: good to read a happy poem.i stay away from poles.i guess the DIY is great,usually i take things in my own hands,when others can,t do THINGS.thank you.bye
Forest Duttinger: Simple and romantic. Good job!!! Good use of metaphors, no rhymes but is good, poetry is not always about rhyming, is about expressions. Keep writing.
David Kuper: Good =]Maxy
Mozell Sponsler: I love the imagery in there with the clothes and the vulnerability of the fabric of life, etc.Its got a feel of a poem I read. It focused on 'nakedness' and one of the lines said "I'm standing alone, shivering on a cold blank stage."If I remember the title I'll give you a link.Thanks for posting.: )...Show more
Dexter Gold: Yes, yes I have and I may hav! e, yah know... "acted" on those emotions before too. (;Good write!--Skinny MiniP.S. I'm with Dallas--hunky firemen (; haha...Show more
Donny Bankson: It's a lot of fun to taunt and playand when it's finally SaturdayI say, best beware if you canI'm your ON TIME delivery manthe fun will last and we wont fightif we just keep each others feelings within sightI will make sure I take great careto not just leave it any old whereyou must be sure to do the samecause to blow it all now would be a shame...Show more
Luke Kosch: Yes, I have.
Lourie Mcroberts: Hmm, I wonder why the onslaught ...
Elvie Drumgoole: This is an Asian style called “Burmese Climbing Rhyme.â€
Marhta Teahan: Why reddog, you wrote me a po=em!!!
Danette Slotnick: *****PREYArrows fly by, missed,Flesh kissed, grazed,They persist, In the haze,Hunting me,I hear them grunt, low;And I, unslow…run away.*****...Show more
Danica Timperman: "Unslow," very Shakespearean. Could ! they be Cupid's arrows, by any chance?Can you give details on this styl! e?
Leticia Laiben: I like the way you write. Flows nicely.
Burt Stoecklin: Yes I haveI preferred the Category>Games and Recreationas opposed to> DIYHa!
Ileen Oshell: and its pretty darn good !!so is your poem
Dick Maisenbacher: These are the thoughts of a deer being hunted...
Edmund Rappley: Nothing promising, but a revision of something I posted last night.The Last Word, Stripped of LanguageSometimes words will fall like loose fabric in the damp weathered mind,but who said that thought was bound to words,when a person tires of the sweatshop folding,or perhaps overwhelmed in such momentswhere thought runs nakedto the incomprehensible soundsbellowing through the streets like the ruckus of some distant screeching stormin the witching hour,(needing to say something)what if their sentences are left visible--in the scroll of written walls between trains-dashes of alleyways,traveling the path of a bullet that arrived too soon,the exclamation point! that punctuates the placewhere maybe a pause should have been-a chalked figure that still shoutshow children will draw rainbows....Show more
Inell Riesgo: Damn!!! ..........He wasn't suppose to come home this earlySorry bad joke ..........We liked this .........Do you have anymore like it??............I think Elaine said it best
Gladys Worthing: Wow. Really good. Lots of imagery and personification. Really captures the feeling. Good job! :)
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